Respond to Alison comments

docs/en_us/developers/source/public_sandboxes.rst

@@ -2,10 +2,11 @@
 edX Public Sandboxes
 ####################
 
-EdX maintains a set of publicly-available sandboxes, to allow contributors
-to interact with the software without having to set it up themselves.
+EdX maintains a set of publicly-available sandboxes that allow contributors
+to interact with the software without having to set up a local development
+environment.
 
-* `edx.org Sandbox`_ for those looking to try out the software powering edx.org
+* `edx.org Sandbox`_ for those looking to try out the software powering edx.org.
 
 * `Language Sandboxes`_ for contributors helping to translate Open edX into
   various languages, who have a need to see translations "in context" - that is,
@@ -17,11 +18,11 @@ edx.org Sandbox
 This sandbox is intended for those looking to try out the software powering
 `edx.org <www.edx.org>`_.
 
-The sandbox allows users staff- and student-level access to a copy of the current
+The sandbox provides staff- and student-level access to a copy of the current
 version of the edx.org website. This sandbox does not allow access to Studio, the
 course-authoring system.
 
-Login by visiting the following url:
+Log in by visiting the following URL:
 
 * `https://www.sandbox.edx.org/ <https://www.sandbox.edx.org/>`_
 
@@ -31,8 +32,8 @@ You can log in to a staff account using the following credentials:
 * password: edx
 
 You can log in to a student account using one the following credentials.
-Each user is enrolled in the demo course with an audit, honor code, or
-verified certificate, respectively:
+These user accounts represent students enrolled in the demo course with an
+audit, honor code, or verified certificate, respectively:
 
 *  username: audit@example.com / honor@example.com / verified@example.com
 *  password: edx
@@ -47,49 +48,51 @@ On edx.org, we only pull down reviewed translations from Transifex. See the
 `translation guidelines <https://github.com/edx/edx-platform/blob/master/docs/en_us/developers/source/i18n_translators_guide.rst#joining-a-review-team>`_
 for more details.
  
-However, these sandboxes present *all* translations, not just reviewed
-translations. This means that you may encounter broken pages as you navigate
-the website. If this happens, it is probably because your language contains
-broken translations (missing HTML tags, altered {placeholders}, etc). Go
-through your translations and see if you can figure out what's broken. Use
+To help you review and test, these sandboxes present *all* translations, not
+just reviewed translations. This means that you may encounter broken pages as
+you navigate the website. If this happens, it is probably because some of the
+translated strings in your language have errors such as missing HTML tags or
+altered {placeholders}. Go through your translations to find and correct these
+types of translation errors. Use
 `this guide <https://github.com/edx/edx-platform/blob/master/docs/en_us/developers/source/i18n_translators_guide.rst#guidelines-for-translators>`_
 to review how to produce non-broken translations.
 
-Accessing The Sandboxes
-=======================
+Visiting the Sandboxes
+======================
 There are two language sandboxes, one for right-to-left, aka "RTL", languages
 (Arabic, Farsi, Hebrew, and Urdu) and a second one for left-to-right, aka "LTR",
 languages. Right now, RTL and LTR cannot be supported on the same installation,
-because the CSS needs to be compiled separately. Fixing this is a task on our
-backlog. 
+because the CSS needs to be compiled separately (fixing this issue is a task on our
+backlog!).
 
-This is our first deployment of our alpha version of RTL language support! If
+Note: This is our first deployment of our alpha version of RTL language support! If
 you have any comments or find any visual bugs, please let us know by posting on the
 `openedx-translation <https://groups.google.com/forum/#!forum/openedx-translation>`_
 mailing list.
 
-You can visit the LMS, or learning management system, at:
+LTR and RTL sandboxes are available for both the LMS, or learning managment system (the part
+of the website that students see) and Studio, the course authoring platform.
+You can access the LMS at:
 
 * LTR Sandbox `http://translation-ltr.m.sandbox.edx.org/ <http://translation-ltr.m.sandbox.edx.org/>`_
 
 * RTL Sandbox `http://translation-rtl.m.sandbox.edx.org/  <http://translation-rtl.m.sandbox.edx.org/>`_
 
-You can also visit Studio (the course authoring platform) at:
+And you can access Studio at:
 
 * LTR Sandbox `http://studio.translation-ltr.m.sandbox.edx.org/ <http://studio.translation-ltr.m.sandbox.edx.org/>`_
 
 * RTL Sandbox `http://studio.translation-rtl.m.sandbox.edx.org/ <http://studio.translation-rtl.m.sandbox.edx.org/>`_
 
-To access the sandboxes you'll be prompted for a username and password, use these:
+To access the sandbox servers, you must supply the following username and password:
 
 * username: edx
 * password: translation
 
-Logging In
-==========
-Language-specific Staff users have been created, which will enable you to access
-Studio as well as see instructor-specific pages within the LMS. You'll be able
-to log into the sandbox using the following convention:
+Logging In To Sandbox Accounts
+==============================
+To log in to the sandbox for a language, you supply the language code in the
+username as follows:
 
 * username: LANGUAGE_CODE@example.com
 * password: edx
@@ -99,30 +102,36 @@ So if you are working on Chinese (China), you'll log in with these credentials:
 * username: zh_CN@example.com
 * password: edx
 
+This user account has Course Staff privileges so that you can test Studio and
+instructor-specific pages in the LMS.
+
 You can also make new student-level user accounts, which is useful for verifying
 translations within the registration flow.
 
-Feel free to mess around in these sandboxes. They can be reset if anything breaks,
-and are completely disconnected from the production version of the edx.org website.
+Feel free to test in any way that you want in these sandboxes. Particularly, you are
+encourage to make new courses, as well as add and delete course content. The sandboxes
+can be reset if anything breaks, and they are completely disconnected from the
+production version of the edx.org website.
 
 
 Caveats and Warnings
 ====================
 #. These sandboxes will be updated with new translations and the newest version
-   of the edx-platform code roughly once per week.
+   of the edx-platform code about once per week.
 
-#. Within the LMS, you can use the language preference widget on the student
-   dashboard page to set your language. However, when viewing Studio or when
-   viewing the site logged-out, the site will use your browser preference to pick
-   which language to display, so make sure your browser is set to the language
-   you're translating to. See `this page on changing browser language
-   <http://www.wikihow.com/Change-Your-Browser's-Language>`_ if you need help.
+#. We recommend users utilize Chrome or Firefox when using the edX courseware.
 
-   Note that we recommend users utilize Chrome or Firefox when using the edX
-   courseware.
+#. When you test, make sure that your browser preference is set to the language
+   you want to test. When you are logged in to the LMS, you can use the
+   language preference widget on the student dashboard page to set or change
+   your language. However, when you are viewing Studio, or if you are not yet
+   logged in to the LMS, the site uses your browser preference to determine
+   what language to display. See `this page on changing your browser's language
+   <http://www.wikihow.com/Change-Your-Browser's-Language>`_ if you need help.
 
-#. To see a normal edX instance in English (useful for comparing), switch your
-   language to English, or visit the `edx.org Sandbox`_.
+#. To see an untranslated edX instance in English, which can be helpful to
+   compare to the translated instance, switch your language to English, or
+   visit the `edx.org Sandbox`_.
 
 #. At the moment, the site does not properly work for languages with an ``@``
    symbol in the language code, so for now, those languages cannot use the
@@ -133,8 +142,8 @@ Caveats and Warnings
 
      tx pull -l LANGUAGE_CODE
 
-   Replace ``LANGUAGE_CODE`` with your code, eg ``zh_CN``. See `this page for instructions on how to
-   configure Transifex <https://github.com/edx/edx-platform/wiki/Internationalization-and-localization>`_.
+   Replace ``LANGUAGE_CODE`` with your code, for example ``zh_CN``.
+   See `this page for instructions on how to configure Transifex <https://github.com/edx/edx-platform/wiki/Internationalization-and-localization>`_.
 
    Next, run the commands::